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Got a crit.
18 Jan 2014 04:52 pmIt's the opposite of every previous crit for this story (including one from someone whose critique is often scathing; he said this was really technically well done, though he said it was polemical :P ). Before I got this crit, I was going to give it another quick cosmetic polish, except now I think it's terrible and sucky.
She also wants me to add in a lot of ~showing~ and ~body language~.
UGGGGGHHHHH.
She also didn't believe that two people who would break up if one of them got a job far away are/were really in love. I don't agree with that assessment, for a variety of reasons, including the fact that no one is entitled to someone else's sacrifices.
So, now what? Do I take the, like, two points I think are actually valid (one of which is a streamlining of a couple sentences) and ignore the rest? Do I trash the whole thing and start over?
She also wants me to add in a lot of ~showing~ and ~body language~.
UGGGGGHHHHH.
She also didn't believe that two people who would break up if one of them got a job far away are/were really in love. I don't agree with that assessment, for a variety of reasons, including the fact that no one is entitled to someone else's sacrifices.
So, now what? Do I take the, like, two points I think are actually valid (one of which is a streamlining of a couple sentences) and ignore the rest? Do I trash the whole thing and start over?
