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feuervogel) wrote2011-02-21 05:11 pm
feuervogel) wrote2011-02-21 05:11 pm
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Writing post of the day
352 words on a new scene. It needs a good bit of work, and I'm not sure I like the thing revealed in the snippet I'm posting. Blackwell needs to be a threat; this is off the top of my head.
“Another thing. The man in charge of security is named Blackwell. It sounds familiar, but I can’t place it.”
Hikaru recognized it too well. “Miss Grünewald, could you please find Mr. Winter for me?”
Metin hid his surprise quickly. After Grünewald left, he said, “I take it you know of him.”
“He’s ex-Hessian. He was kicked out for taking bribes. My uncle caught him and Grandfather signed the paperwork.”
Your thoughts? Blackwell is the mercenary commander on the other side. This makes him more likely to deduce certain things about our covert friends. The alternative I've come up with is that he and Hikaru's uncle or grandfather had some sort of combatish interaction with him, or had heard he's a particularly heartless bastard (though I kind of have that with a different bad guy, and I don't want to be repetitive.)
“Another thing. The man in charge of security is named Blackwell. It sounds familiar, but I can’t place it.”
Hikaru recognized it too well. “Miss Grünewald, could you please find Mr. Winter for me?”
Metin hid his surprise quickly. After Grünewald left, he said, “I take it you know of him.”
“He’s ex-Hessian. He was kicked out for taking bribes. My uncle caught him and Grandfather signed the paperwork.”
Your thoughts? Blackwell is the mercenary commander on the other side. This makes him more likely to deduce certain things about our covert friends. The alternative I've come up with is that he and Hikaru's uncle or grandfather had some sort of combatish interaction with him, or had heard he's a particularly heartless bastard (though I kind of have that with a different bad guy, and I don't want to be repetitive.)
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"Everybody does it" won't fly in the Hessian company. They don't do it. Except the handful who do and are kicked out. The point is to set up one of the main differences between the Hessians and the Martians. One is generally honest and law-abiding (even as they enforce the laws: cops aren't above the law, after all); the other ignores graft and corruption unless it really screws things up (ie, undermines the leadership's authority, etc).