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feuervogel) wrote2011-01-18 04:39 pm
feuervogel) wrote2011-01-18 04:39 pm
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Revise, revise, revise. Plus a question for Germans
In the effort to get this bloody short story as polished as possible to send in as my Viable Paradise application, I've asked my new writing group and some writerly friends for crit. It's definitely getting tighter with the input from Don, who also caught a continuity error that I added on revision (oops), and the underlying internal conflict is going to be a bit more prominent.
Which leads me to the question for the Germans. Is there any sort of stigma associated with Valkyries/Walküre? Like, is it an insult, or is it part of the right-wing neo-fascists' adoration of all things Germannia, or whatever? I don't want to commit a major faux pas.
And I was beset by yet another vague idea for a story when reading ... someone's blog post about how teenage girls aren't yet part of mainstream canon and how there's more to their lives than being popular & crushing on people, like forming friendships with other girls. I just don't know which of my women I want to revisit as a teenager. Hikaru would be focused on becoming a Hessian, and she could be dealing with her family's expectations (as well as her being a lesbian... yes, I know the lesbian military officer is cliche, but I didn't start off with that as part of her character. It just happened.) But Azar, the second MC of The Novel, could have a very interesting story, though I would have to do a LOT LOT LOT LOT more research, because she's a (probably Shi'a) Muslim living in a dictatorship not unlike present-day Iran, except without the morality police, etc.
I still need to figure out how I'm going to write a story basically about Berlin & its history that would be of interest to people other than me.
Which leads me to the question for the Germans. Is there any sort of stigma associated with Valkyries/Walküre? Like, is it an insult, or is it part of the right-wing neo-fascists' adoration of all things Germannia, or whatever? I don't want to commit a major faux pas.
And I was beset by yet another vague idea for a story when reading ... someone's blog post about how teenage girls aren't yet part of mainstream canon and how there's more to their lives than being popular & crushing on people, like forming friendships with other girls. I just don't know which of my women I want to revisit as a teenager. Hikaru would be focused on becoming a Hessian, and she could be dealing with her family's expectations (as well as her being a lesbian... yes, I know the lesbian military officer is cliche, but I didn't start off with that as part of her character. It just happened.) But Azar, the second MC of The Novel, could have a very interesting story, though I would have to do a LOT LOT LOT LOT more research, because she's a (probably Shi'a) Muslim living in a dictatorship not unlike present-day Iran, except without the morality police, etc.
I still need to figure out how I'm going to write a story basically about Berlin & its history that would be of interest to people other than me.